nice disonance!
i really liked this melody and it'll probably be stuck in my head for a little while at least. i liked the movements in the song the most, although most people would probably think they were awkward (haha! i guess that means i have an ear!) it is true that the piano could be brought about more and not so dark, but it was still very nice, especially with that disonance. way to paint a picture man =) keep up the good work!