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Worth pursuing, but needs some work

I'd suggest, for your own peace of mind, avoiding the sequence on that Toxic Biohazard sound, simply because it's from the base presets. I'd recommend changing up the waveforms and the sequencer steps here to produce your OWN sound.

The bass works, but isn't dynamic nor dirty enough in my opinion. You'll want to find a way to work with the frequency cutoff, perhaps add a little "room reverb" (just a little bit to give that bass some edge), and maybe add some distortion and drive (you can check out some of my dubstep songs to see what I mean...while I'm by no means "perfect," I've been able to get some pretty edgy sounds outta the bass through experimentation).

The drums seriously need some work. In fact, this is probably the biggest area that needs some work. There isn't enough going on here. The kick doesn't stand out enough, and the snare is too "acoustic." To fix this, try layering the bass drum with a sine wave, and layering the snare with a tuned-down clap and a quieter electronica snare sample, to give your drums that extra punch, so to speak. You also need some more hats; I would recommend experimenting with getting those hats on 16th-note intervals, giving your drums a little more character; of course, don't just put the hats on EVERY 16th note, but vary it up in interesting ways. You also need to add some fills and varying drum parts, because although you've got the dubstep beat right, this is just the BASE. I'd also recommend increasing the tempo slightly, as it feels like the slowness drags the song behind in energy a little bit.

The basic melody is very cool, but could use some expansion. And I like that swooshing sound you use to transition the movement, but the song needs some work in areas. The first place you should start is with the bass, followed by the drums. If you've got any further questions, feel free to PM me. You've got a great idea here, you just gotta finish it!

7/10
4/5

Blackhole12 recommended this to me...I like!

I love this sort of ambient DnB stuff, and the drumwork is phenomenal. Really, it's quite good, I love it! I love that breakbeat, glitchy stuff you add throughout the song... Really, it's great! Essentially, this is one sexy song man! I can definitely see why Blackhole12 recommended this track to me. I think the only thing I'd recommend is finding something else to replace that "whistling" thing, such as at 2:20-ish. The song could also benefit from an increased bass section later on in the song, keeping the same melody of course. I love this a lot as it stands though, it's really great work man!

Blackhole12 was right in recommending you to me, we produce similar stuff. I highly recommend you check out my latest dubstep track to see what I mean ("Reflections"...I dunno if you like dubstep much or not, but you'll see how we both have a build-up section, choirs, and a final concluding playground, with some nice breakdown sections and what not, etc.; BH12 thought that my song coulda been better suited to something like this, and I can definitely see why he would see this...in fact, this track makes me want to make an ambient DnB track even more than I wanted to already lol!). But anyway, thanks for the beautiful song, keep up the work like this man! You've just became one of my favorite Audio artists!
9/10
5/5
Fav'd.

SessileNomad responds:

i really am not a fan of dubstep, ive heard like...2 songs that were good : /

awww replacing the whistling sound i like that, its a sweep up with a high resonance phaser on it, i like how it blended

thanks for the review, i dont remember blackhole liking this very much, but im not complaining

anyway, ill check out your tracks when i can

A little bit repetitive, but pretty good

I love the motifs here, and I also like how you followed the dubstep formula. Nice use of clips from Agent Smith, it sent a chill down my spine, remember the matrix. I would say, believe it or not (although I'm listening to this through my bass-biased headphones), that that bass could use a little more grime on it. I think the way you could do that is switching up the register that bass sits in (i.e., let it hit the current register, then take it down an octave for a second, giving your bass a little more character). It could use just a slight more bass register in my opinion, but it's still pretty good. The drums are rather divine, I just wish they woulda picked up somewhere, because the song got too repetitive at points. I'm also very intrigued by that slowing-down-scratching noise you make (such as at about 3:47 to 3:48). Any pointers on how to create it? I'd like to learn any tricks of the trade. You don't have to tell me here; just PM me for secrecy...if you feel like telling me, that is lol.

Reignee responds:

Cheers for the feedback ! I'll try that about the bass, I think I did it with one of my basses, but kinda forgot about the other. to keep things short I'll send you a PM about the slowing down thing ;)

Very cool...This belongs to the NG people

Very cool idea. It's insane how many people submitted their songs. There's a lot of great stuff here, I wish I woulda known about this because I would've gladly submitted a track for you to use. I think, since this is such a collaborative effort, it automatically makes it beautiful. Not only, but the transitions are very VERY nice. It's crazy how much is going on here, how many different styles everyone has. I hear everything here: Trance, Dance, DnB influences, classical, metal, folk...lovely! I'm assuming, btw, that Pure-Metal-UTA did the guitar work at the end? Haha, good stuff man. This is truly the NG community submission!
10/10
5/5

InvisibleObserver responds:

Keep tabs on Rig's posting, he has plans to host many future exquisite corpses with different parameters.

Thanks for the positive words.

Btw, we do give a f@#$

It's a good song. Really, a great song. It's got less going on that the song I made, so that all the frequencies line up perfectly, and nothing's overpowering. I just wish that I knew how to get such a master on my own track. It would be rather nice if you suggested how my song shoulda been mastered though man, rather than leaving me completely in the dark. The melody certainly isn't original, as it follows a typical VI-VII-i chord structure, but done well, mostly because of the layering process. The only thing I would suggest changing about this song is the structure; it could definitely use a B section, as every section is just a different emphasis of the same central melody, which makes it a little boring after a while. The synths used are rather nice, and the choir is a very nice add, good stuff. Keep it up, as this is what the competition for NGADM should be like!
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5/5
P.S. We do give a f@#$, if we didn't then we'd completely ignore you, it's just that you find a way to debase your entire review without backing it up in anyway. Look above.^^ Okay, the bad things I said about your song: The melody is unoriginal and boring. However, I told you why: It follows a typical chord structure, and it's too repetitious. It wouldn't have been fair to you if I didn't support this, as this won't help you produce a better song in the future. THAT'S the kind of feedback I'd like, man; I'd especially love mastering advice, as this is why I believe my song sounds so pathetic.

ErikMcClure responds:

Yeah melody sucks. Its not mastered. This isn't mastering, its EQing. This has been argued endlessly on the forums but no one seems to care. EQing has to do with mixing things properly. I can't tell you how to EQ your song better in a review since it takes a 10-page tutorial.

I can hear it in there

By the way, I'm pretty sure, so long as you say it's a remix and give credit as to where you got the original sound clip, you can use the vocals...although I'm not dead positive on that. But, I can definitely hear "In for the Kill" in there (just lettin ya know, Skream already made a remix of this song...but, you may have known that already). You've got a good build-up, and I'm loving your drops of late man. I'm realizing, now that I think about it, there are 2 effects your bass could benefit from a little bit:
1.) Some EQing. Especially boost it in the Ultra Bass and High Mid sections, but lower it in the Low Mid. This brings your bass out in the frequency ranges you want.
2.) Some Reverb. Add just a hint of reverb, and your bass takes on this epic persona. Be careful how much you add though; you don't want to add so much that it sounds like mud.
3.) Try adding some stereo to it. If you balance it in the left and right equally on all ends (not entirely sure which program you use, but in FL they have the Stereo Shaper, which can really fill out your sound), your bass will sound that much bigger...of course, you might have to up the sound of it, as the sound distribution will be greater in this respect, but I dunno man. Just look into it.
Cool stuff man. Glad to hear that your bass is sounding more and more epic with every song you release! Btw, don't forget about your "Reason" WIP, that stuff is pretty damn awesome man! Keep it up!
9/10
5/5
P.S. I'm releasing my song tomorrow. You're invited for a premiere listen. ;)

Aydin-Jewelz123 responds:

Yo dude, thanks for all the great feedback on both songs! Really helpful stuff & I really appreciate it!! :) I will do my best to make sure I do both songs justice!

Great!

I really REALLY like what you've got goin on here! Nice use of the formant, which is something that most people on NG have yet to discover to use (you'll see it in my next song man, it's pretty sexy stuff lol). A few suggestions:
1.) Make sure you get that "reason" vocal clip to match up with your drumbeats somehow. Try splicing it or something. But seeing as you were just aiming for a theme, I see why it doesn't line up lol.
2.) Fill out that drop a little bit more. It's a great - GREAT - idea, it just doesn't come in heavy enough. Lord knows, you beat me to the drop (I plan on improving my drops past this song...you outdid me in this aspect lol). Just make sure to add some heavy percussion, fill out the bass, or something to emphasize the officialness of the bass.
3.) You've got either too much distortion or too much resonance on your formant bass. Turn it down a little bit to let the pitch come through, cuz right now it just sounds like a YA YA mess lol...which isn't necessarily a bad thing, but I think you'll want to emphasize the melody that you introduced in the beginning for sure. I'd also recommend mixing it with some wub bass to change it up, just to keep the listener from getting bored, ya know?
But, other than this stuff, it sounds GREAT. I seriously got excited from hearing this. It makes me want to add vocals to my own stuff SOOO bad lol. You've got some things to work on yet, but you're well on your way to that amazing dubstep sound man, great stuff! Do NOT let this track go unfinished man!
9/10
5/5

Okay, man...not funny

Dude, why the hell would you think it would be funny to put this up here? This shit hurt my ears dammit! I thought it might be something at least a little humorous, given the title, but really dude? Don't just post 1 minute and 29 seconds of something that will waste my time...and leave me wishing I hadn't clicked play because of the bath blood oozing from my ears thanks to the lovely ultra-high frequencies that you strung together because you thought it would be funny. Dick! >=(
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Guitarripper responds:

if thats hOw you fell mr.gazzmane

I agree, very primal

Good stuff all around, I like the main melody a lot...it reminded me of some midnight Native American ritual dance or something, pretty epic. Good thing you got Gravey to master this one for ya, he's pretty freaking epic lol. I think the only thing I don't like about it is that it feels that the strings go a little bit too high in places, almost unrealistically. However, the vision of the song is what keeps this one persistent in particular, and I can't really complain about anything much; it was supposed to be somewhat ambient and open, so I understand why the instrumentation and effects were kept to a minimum. Good job man, keep it up!
9/10
5/5

Aeris responds:

Thanks, Gravey and I are really close friends, we both started up on newgrounds at about the same time, so asking him to master my stuff wasn't too big x3; I just don't really pay as much attention to Newgrounds as much as he does.

I wasn't going for a very realistic sound here, so the strings comment would make sense. Thanks for the review! And if you're interested in more of my mature music, I should have stuff up on http://ww w.artistcrazemedia.com/ in a week or so.

Thanks again,
-Aeris.

Not too bad for a first shot

Nice attention to the drop, but I woulda expanded a little bit on that intro (it just feels like it needs a little bit more development, ya know? like some sort of melody or something). As this is just supposed to be for a ringtone, the square sound for the bass is understandable (a "grungy" bass would detract completely from the ringtone sound). However, as you noted above, that bassline is "sketchy" and I'm not particularly turned on to the last portion of it (where it just goes up on discordant sounds...although the fade-in on that distorted thing is a nice inclusion). If you want some future inspiration, Bar9 is the guy you'll wanna check out; he's a f@#$ing godfather of sorts, holding some of the most coveted dubstep bass I ever heard. Also, we need to work on that bass for future songs; like I said, it works here because of the medium you're using, but I don't know how this would hold up at a club. If you need any help producing a dirtier bass in the future, hook me up; I've figured out how to produce some bass akin to Skream, and I've got that whole formant bass thing down too (you know, where it sounds like the bass is saying YA YA, a la artists such as Funtcase...and Pendulum uses it in their track "Set Me On Fire"). Good shot for a first attempt (better than mine, and mine was 3 times longer than this lol =P), but you'll need to listen to the big boys if you wanna get that pro-sounding dubstep (only way to improve, ya know?).
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